I was on the edge of my seat! You have used some really interesting vocabulary and it has built the suspense brilliantly. A few things, when you wrap something you usually wrap it AROUND rather then over something. You have also used some fantastic onomatopoeia and emotive adjectives to engage the reader.
I was on the edge of my seat! You have used some really interesting vocabulary and it has built the suspense brilliantly. A few things, when you wrap something you usually wrap it AROUND rather then over something. You have also used some fantastic onomatopoeia and emotive adjectives to engage the reader.